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Tdday I woke up very early, cause df the alam bell. so my eyes were opened, but my body couldn't go out of my bed. My dad put his quilt on to me so I felt more warmer so I felt more sleepy. But I knew that I need to get up. Because today my dad was living to Australia. Bot I still didn't came out.I heard my dad's footstep too to get prepared. So that's how come that i sleapt for two more hourse. So I thought my mom was very mad at me so I did my work very quitly. When I was done I was little bit hungry, but I didn't ask for ant breackfast. Cause I didn't really in a mood I think. But then my mom asked me breackfast. So I had to eat. After breackfast, I read a book. It was called "Gulliver's Travel" It was very interesting book. Gulliver always wanted to travel by sea. So one day he traveled by ship. But he met a very big stotm. So he found a Island and he sleapt.then when he woke up, he saw mant little people. They were very small. SO everyone wanted to know about him. And lots of things happens when Gulliver stay at the island. And he protect the island. But there were not enough food for him so he went back to England. It is a very good book. I love it so much. Then I took a bath. Then best of all I ate pizza for dinner. It was so good~~~ I wish I could it it again. And my day is over. ****************************Editor*************************** Today I woke up very early to an alarm. My eyes were opened, but I couldn't get out of bed. My dad put his quilt over me so I felt warmer and also, more sleepy. I knew that I needed to get up because today my dad was leaving for Australia. Still, I didn't get out of bed.I heard my dad's footsteps as he got prepared. That's why I sleapt for two more hours. When I woke up, I thought my mom was very mad at me, so I did my work very quietly. When I was done I was a little bit hungry, but I didn't ask for any breakfast. I think I wasn't really in the mood. But then my mom asked me to have breakfast ,so I had to eat. After breakfast, I read a book. It was called "Gulliver's Travel". It was a very interesting book. Gulliver always wanted to travel by sea. So one day he traveled by ship. On his trip he met a very big storm, so he found an island and sleapt there. When he woke up, he saw many little people. They were very small. They wanted to know about him. Lots of things happens while Gulliver stayed at the island. He protected the island but there was not enough food for him so he went back to England. It is a very good book. I love it so much. Next I took a bath, and best of all I ate pizza for dinner. It was so good, I wish I could eat it again. ...and my day was over. Editor's notes: Your english is very good. I understood what you were saying just fine. Most of my changes were simply removing the first word of the sentence. Try not to start sentences with "but", "and" or "so" these words are for joining ideas together (Now I want to eat some pizza, hehe). =) |